'Of Unsound Minds' Final Draft

Total Film poster final design

Final Film poster design

Made using Adobe Photoshop CS6

Here is my final film poster. After designing the first three posters and having good feedback on each of the posters, I have tried to incorporate an element of each poster in the final design in order to please my target audience.

Evaluation Question 4

Evaluation question 3

Evaluation question 3 script

What have you learnt from audience feedback? Research into my target audience and what they like films to consist of, helped me to notice that a linear narrative which had a closed ending would be the most well liked short film. Even though the vote saw that the most preferable genre of film was comedy, as a group we decided that creating an effective comedy in a short 5 minute period would be a big challenge and thus have gone with the second most popular genre which is drama. The amount of votes suggesting that people like endings with mixed emotions also gives us leeway for the ending of our film as we can decided as a group whether to make the ending shocking and upsetting, or decide that we would like to go for a happy ending. Finally, the vote on traits gave us a clear indication that people who are unpredictable or hard to read were the people that most people found frightening and therefore we will try to incorporate this into our film going forward. Screenplay interview: People like the dark mysterious elements of our film,but we realised that the narrative could at times appear confusing. In order to combat this we knew that we would need to focus heavily on the cinematography or simplify the screenplay, however we decided to put emphasis on the cinematography as people did enjoy the story which was given by the screenplay. Teacher feedback: From the first feedback from my teacher I have been able to noticed that more detail needs to be added to my work in order to help create a better standard of filming. This goes for all of the different aspects such as research and planning as this will mean that I have done the sufficient research in the genre of film that I am creating, as well as the actual narrative planning behind my own film. Following prior feedback from my teacher I completed the tasks set out for me to do so. However, I was advised to add greater depth to my organisation and time management. Therefore I focused on this when continuing with work on my blog in order to bring my level of work up. Animatic feedback: From the animatic feedback we were able to discover that the genre and narrative of the film was coming through effectively, however it could easily be improved- especially when using the overlapping dialogue as we were told that at times this was hard to hear and therefore this is something we practiced before filming in order to make sure that it was perfected and easy to interpret. We also discovered that our non-diegetic sound needed to be improved as we were told that at times it added nothing and seemed out of time, thus we was able to develop this whilst going forward in the production stage of our film. Film review feedback: Through the feedback I received on my film review I noticed that I would need to make a few subtle tweaks to the layout in order to make it appear as professional as possible and make sure that the alignments are as intended. As well as this, a few grammatical errors were spotted due to changing the layout of the text itself and therefore this also needs to be corrected. This was all good information as it meant that moving forward I was able to make the film review even better as it would appear even more professional than it already did. Film poster feedback: From the feedback made on my three roughly designed posters I was given both positive and negative effects of all of these posters and worked towards making them better. The most popular design was the third design which incorporated an illustration of the skull due the abstract design, however other comments about the other posters commented on the good use of Photoshop in the other two. This therefore means that I was able to make a fourth poster after getting further answers on a favourite design which incorporates a few good features from each design and this allowed me to make an overall design which used elements of each poster and created a poster that I was very pleased with due to its originality and simplistic yet intriguing design. Screenplay 2 feedback: After changing our screenplay we carried out more research from which we were able to discover that our target audience would prefer us to cut out some unnecessary lines in order to make the dialogue of the film more concise as well as making the narrative of the film clearer. They also would like us to make it more clear the purpose of the voices of the doctor and the dead character, so therefore we need to make this more clear to our audience and this is something that we were able to focus on through the filming of the narrative for the final piece. Feedback on second draft: From this feedback we now know that re-filming in order to improve certain shots and certain areas of continuity is key to improving our film, as well as making the split personality of Rob more clear in order to make the narrative of the whole film more vivid and clear to the target audience.

Evaluation question 2

Evaluation Question 1

Editing Log

1st December: Rough edit together, without sound and without adobe after effects mirror sequence. 2 hours of rough editing together whilst taking notes of continuity errors which will need to be fixed in refilm.

2nd December: 2 hours. Diegetic and non-diegetic sound added to the film in order to see what first draft would appear like. Gathered feedback ready to make changes when necessary.

4th December: Adobe after effects-1:30 hours. Mirror sequences edited together using adobe after effects and added into the film in order to bring the sequence and narrative to life.

7th December: Titles and credits added to film in order to add the professional edge to the film. 1:30 hours. Final notes taken ready for re film and re edit.

11 December: Refilmed shots added to the film. 

12 December: Voiceovers recorded and added to the film. Diegetic sound also added in order to add atmosphere.

13 December: Final edit put together and checked over with group. 

Physical Costume design

This is the costumes we decided to use when filming the final draft of our film 'Of Unsound Minds'. We decided to use contrasting black, white and grey colour schemes in order to portray the good v evil characteristics of our main protagonist Rob. The grey colour of Rob's shirt shows how he has a mixture of good and evil which is portrayed through the different characters in the mirror sequences. The dead character wears black to symbolise mystery and evil within Rob's head as he is supposedly a vision of a horrible deed committed by Rob, whilst the Doctor wears white to symbolise how he is supposed to help and guide Rob through his mental struggle.

Re-filming second draft time schedule

Timings and schedule for the re-draft of 'Of Unsound Minds':

13:30-Actors and crew arrive at filming location ready to watch through first draft and take individual notes on what they would change and where improvements need to be made.
14:00- Compare notes and make a checklist of what shots need to be re-filmed in order to make the film a better quality.
14:30- Prepare filming equipment, props and costumes ready for use and have the actors learn their lines ready to be filmed.
15:30- Get changed into costumes and set up lights and camera ready for sunset and darkness outside.
16:00 (or when Sunset occurs)- Begin filming making sure that the shots are checked off on the checklist as they are done to the correct standard.
18:00- Re watch through clips one last time and make sure that the group agree that they are of the highest possible standard and if not re-film again and check
19:00- Take SD card from camera and save files onto computer in order to not lose the files, begin editing the new clips into the clips which are staying from the first draft of the film.

Reece for second draft

For the second draft of our film we have decided to change the location of filming in order to make it appear less like a drama production and also add more depth to the shots in the film. This location will allow us to shoot through doorways, creating more depth and the small enclosed space of the bathroom will have the same affect as the small dark room we were using previously. This therefore this means that the same effect will be portrayed to the audience, but in a more suitable location. This location also will be available at any time we wish to film, unlike the previous studio which we needed to book in advance and thus makes it easier to film.

Arranging a time to film with crew and actors

Feedback on second draft- Written

From this feedback we now know that re-filming in order to improve certain shots and certain areas of continuity is key to improving our film, as well as making the split personality of Rob more clear in order to make the narrative of the whole film more vivid and clear to the target audience.

'Of Unsound Minds' Second draft

Interviews for 'Of Unsound Minds' lead role

DECISION: George Bull- delivered the lines in the clearest manner with the most emotion and acting prowess. Will work well in the role as took on advice of character quickly and adapted to working in front of a camera quickly in comparison to the other two candidates.

Profile of potential actors

George Bull: Age 18, Male, Brown hair, GCSE actor, theatre production actor, school production performer.

Short film experience? First draft 'Of Unsound Minds'

Jake Curtis: Age 17, Male, Brown hair, No previous acting experience

Short Film experience: None

Joe Deighton: Age 17, Male, Blonde hair, A-Level actor, school production performer.

Short film experience? 'Smile' AS Media piece.First draft 'Of Unsound Minds'

Luke Scrivener: Age 17, Male, Brown hair, GCSE actor, School proudction performer.

Short film experience? 

'Smile' AS Media piece, First draft 'Of Unsound Minds'

Decision:

First choice: George Bull

Second choice: Luke Scrivener

Third Choice: Joe Deighton

Fourth Choice: Jake Curtis

Character profile- updated new

Rob: works in the city as a stockbroker 8am-6pm. Rob doesn't get enough sleep as he gets home at 8pm and continues to work at home until 1am. He feels he isn't successful in comparison to everyone else at work and feels if he does extra work he will be on par with them. He is having a rough period and only gets 5 hours sleep as he has to get to work at 7:30, making him stressed because of the environment he works in is very fast paced and you can't put a foot wrong as the whole businesses reputation is on the line. His schziophrenic nature leads him to situations where he is not in control and very vulnerable/scared.

Therapist/Doc: A doctor trying to comfort Rob and help him get over his mental health issues. He is very intelligent, cool, calm and collected and handles intense situations with ease and really tries to get to the bottom of Rob's problems;brings the truth out of him as he knows that he is the only person Rob can confidient and collected with. 

Personality 1/ dead person:

Unknown character who appears in mirror after appearing to have been killed by Rob. Pale, blonde man who looks weak and innocent.

Sheet of tasks to do on blog

In order to make sure that my blog was totally up to date I made a checklist of what I wanted to add in order to make sure that my blog and film could be of the best possible standard. This helped majorly with my time management as it meant I knew what I had to do and made sure that I actually did this.

Prop knife

From preparing our risk assessment we noticed that a potential hazard could be due to the knife that would need to be used in the film. In order to limit the potential harm of the knife we have decided to find a prop knife to use as is completely made of plastic, but still appears realistic in filming.